T2+Narrative

[|T2 Narrative]

__Monday 27 June__

__**Comment: Wow Daniel this story grabs my attention right from the start. It is as though I can imagine the scene happening right before my eyes**__

__**Target - Next Steps (Level 4)**__ __**Use correct punctuation for dialogue, this will help the reader know who is speaking and follow the story line (as discussed)**__ __**Have an increased control of the story elements e.g. keep to first person & past tense**__

Great writing Daniel You have always had a way with your discriptive writing as your Teacher says it makes you feel like you are their Well Done, May be a Writer in the making with a few spelling lessons. Go Dan

Duncan McPherson

“40 seconds” the Corporal shouts. My team of 30 men in wolf company were in a small landing craft that had no roof with tall walls and a ramp that opens downwards. Smashing waves crashed against the boat as I held a photo of my wife firmly in my hand while the enemy fired bullets at us, lodging in to the sea around us. Someone in my landing craft looked over the top of the ramp to see the other boats, that had all ready hit the shores of the beach, getting shot at as soon as they open their ramps from the two bunkers over hanging the cliff. As he peers over a heavy gun rips bullets into his face as he falls on me. “Every One Duck” Sergeant James says while he pulls Corporal Alex down. Bullets ricochet of the boat like a ball getting hit by a bat. As the boat ramp opens it revels the terror of the war, men just getting slaughtered by gun fire, bombs going of in all directions making there nowhere to run.All the people in the front are getting shot so I grab my gun and scramble over the side of the boat, as I take a big breath. lunging in to the water bullets engrave in to the water as I sprint to a crashed boat on the sand. I shout out "Wolf company, group ..."group. Sam, Matt, Tom, Carl and Sergeant James run over to me. “ We need to get all the men up the beach, Tom come with me and the rest of you get your sorry asses up the beach” Sergeant James commands. “YES SER” we reply. Screaming men cry for help as I run up the beach with Matt and take cover. I see the bullets flying in the air, killing men with no serender. bombs getting dropped by planes landing on my Conrad’s. Matt shouts over all of the gun fire “we need to get to the barb wire”. “ You go I will cover you” He sprints up the beach dodging bombs. “NOOO” I cry as a plan charges down Matt and fires rapidly. I stere in silence at Matt lying on the ground. I screamed “ paramedic paramedic” a paramedic runs out to help him as I go and get the explosive up the shore. The solders with the explosive are half way up the beach so I run from cover to cover until I get to the last cover from a little sand don with the barb wire on it.

leaping to cover Sam, Carl and sergeant James crouch next to me. “Where’s Tom” I asked “he got bombed running up the beach with dog company” Sam says while he fires five rounds at the enemy. “GET TO THE SAND DUNES” sergeant James say firmly. Sergeant James goes first and then Sam and Carl go while call up some men behind me. As we run to the sand don with the other men two machine guns spot as and start firing. All the men around me stand falling to the ground, running as fast as I could I knew I was going to make to. A german rifle man aims at me holds while his breath and slowly pulls the trigger. BANG! the rifle goes. The sharp narrow bullet loges into my leg as I collapse to the ground. A bomb gets dives into the ground five meters away from me. Every think goes quiet but the only thing that I can hear is a high perched sound, two men come to help to the sand don but when one of them grabs my hand he gets slaughtered by gun fire. Sergeant James comes to me and pulls me to the sand dun. I can't make out what Sergeant James was saying to me. After 30 seconds I came rite. “Putting in the explosives!” shouts the explosive specialist putting the explosives under the barb wire. BOOOOOMM!! Sergeant James instructed “Ok maggots you need to get go around the mine field to the cliff line, Wolf and bravo company go first and ghost company and fences company stay back here with me” “YES SIR” we shout “Three, two, one go go go” Carl shouts. As we run dirt flies in our faces, bullets flying killing men like flies getting hit by a fly swat. Jumping to the cliff face we wait for the Sergeant James to radio as for the next objective. neiling and standing we wait, more men run around the mine field and join as watching friends and family getting killed by the terror of the war. “We have to shoot the grappling hooks up the cliff and get up”bravo company “Sergeant James orders”. “Start climbing men, the Sergeant will join as so” I order. Sweaty slippery hands climb up the ropes. As i’m close to the top a explosion happens and sends men falling down the cliff. Dogging the men one clips my arm and I slip but sam grabs me like a rugby player catching a ball. I climb to the top I get to cover next to my company. “ Ok wolf company and I will take out the banker on the right and bravo company you will take out the left banker” I explained fast. “MOVE OUT”. As we were moving to the banker Five men will run to the next barricade and the rest would cover them and the the next five would go. Placing the charge on the back door of the bunker, wolf company stood by aiming at the door. BOOM! “Throwing a grenade” shouts wolf lieutenant. BOOM! Me and Sam scout through the banker first. As I lean on the wall, taking a breath a I crouch around the corner looking though the cross hairs I fire two bullets in to a german soldier lessening in on the radio. Sneaking into to the room that over views the beach four german solders on machine guns. Firing rounds in to the enemy. As we go back out bravo company are pulling wounded solders to field medics. Sam calls me over to Sergeant James for a promotion but as we where talking a bullet goes through his head from a sniper in a bush. I firer at the sniper and cry for a medic. Sergeant James coughs up some blood and says “ It is a good day to die”

__Thursday 23 June__

“40 seconds” the Corporal shouts. My team of 30 men in wolf company were in a small landing craft that had no roof with tall walls and a ramp that opens downwards. Smashing waves crash against the boat as I hold a photo of my wife firmly in my hand while the enemy are firing bullets at us, lodging in to the sea around us. Someone in my landing craft looks over the top of the ramp to see the other boats, that had all ready hit the shores of the beach, getting shoot at as soon as they open their ramps. As he peers over a heavy gun rips bullets into his face as he falls on me. “Every One Duck” Sergeant James says wail he pulls Corporal Alex down. Bullets raker shade of the boat like a ball getting hit by a bat. As the boat ramp opens it revels the terror of the war, men just getting slaughtered by gun fire, bombs going of in all directions making there nowhere to run.All the people in the front are getting shot so I grab my gun and scramble over the side of the boat, as I take a big breath. lunging in to the water bullets engrave in to the water as I sprint to a crashed boat on the sand. I shout out for my company. Sam, Matt, Tom, Carl and Sergeant James runs over to me. “ We need to get all the men up the beach, Tom come with me and the rest of you get your sorry asses up the beach” “YES SER” we reply. Screaming men cry for help as I run up the beach with Matt and take cover. I see the bullets flying in the air, killing men with no serenader. bombs getting dropped by planes landing on my Conrad's. Matt shouts over all of the gun fire “we need to get to the barb wire”. “ You go I will cover you” He sprints up the beach dodging bombs. “NOOO” I cry as a plan charges down Matt and fires rapidly. I stere in silence at Matt lying on the ground. I screamed “ paramedic paramedic” a paramedic runs out to help him as I go and get the explosive up the shore. The solders with the explosive are half way up the beach so I run from cover to cover until I get to the last cover from a little sand don with the barb wire on it.

leaping to cover Sam, Carl and sergeant James crouch next to me. “Where’s Tom” I asked “he got bombed running up the beach with dog company” Sam says while he fires five rounds at the enemy. “GET TO THE SAND DON” sergeant James say firmly. Sergeant James goes first and then Sam and Carl go while call up some men behind me. As we run to the sand don with the other men two machine guns spot as and start firing. All the men around me stand falling to the ground, running as fast as I could I knew I was going to make to. A german rifle man aims at me holds while his breath and slowly pulls the trigger. BANG! the rifle goes. The sharp narrow bullet loges into my leg as I collapse to the ground. A bomb gets dives into the ground five meters away from me. Every think goes quiet but the only thing that I can hear is a high perched sound, two men come to help to the sand don but when one of them grabs my hand he gets slaughtered by gun fire. Sergeant James comes to me and pulls me to the sand don. I can't make out what Sergeant James was saying to me. After 30 seconds

__Wednesday 22 June__

“40 seconds” the Corporal shouts. My team of 30 men were a small boat that had no roof with tall walls and a ramp that opens down would. Smashing waves crash against the boat as I hold a photo of my wife firmly in my hand wail the enemy are firing bullets at as langing in to the sea around us. Some one in my boat goes to look over the top of the boat too see the other boats that had all ready had hit the shores of the beach getting shoot at as soon as they open the ramps. As he peers over a heavy gun reaps bullets into his face as he falls on me. “Every one duck” Sergeant James says wail he pulls Corporal Alex down. Bullets raker shade of the boat like a ball getting hit by a bat. As the boat ramp opens it revels the tera of the war, men just getting slortted by gun fire, bombs going of in all directions making there nowhere to run.All the people in the front get shot so I grab my gun and scramble over the side of the boat as I take a big breath. lunging in to the water bullets engrave in to the water as I sprint to a crashed boat on the sand. I shout out for my company. Sam, Matt, Tom and Sergeant James runs over to me. “ We need to get all the men up the beach, Tom come with me and the rest of you get your sorry asses up the beach” “YES SER” we reply. Screaming men cry for help as I run up the beach with Matt and take cover. I see the bullets flying in the air, killing men with no serenader. bombs getting droped by planes landing on my Conrad's. Matt shouts over all of the gun fire “we need to get to the barb wire”. “ You go I will cover you” He sprints up the beach dodging bombs. “NOOO” I cry as a plan charges down Matt and fires rapidly. I stere in silence at Matt lying on the ground. I screamed “ paramedic paramedic” a paramedic runs out to help him as I go and get the explosive up the shore. The solders with the explosive are half way up the beach so I run from cover to cover until I get to the last cover from a little sand don with the barb wire on it.

__Tuesday 21 June__

“40 seconds” the Corporal shouts. My team of 30 men were a small boat that had no roof with tall walls and a ramp that opens down would. Smashing waves crash against the boat as I hold a photo of my wife firmly in my hand wail the enemy are firing bullets at as langing in to the sea around us. Some one in my boat goes to look over the top of the boat too see the other boats that had all ready had hit the shores of the beach getting shoot at as soon as they open the ramps. As he peers over a heavy gun reaps bullets into his face as he falls on me. “Every one duck” Sergeant James says wail he pulls Corporal Alex down.

Friday 10 June

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Lazy

Lazy larks around the town with a frown on his face and making eye contact to any one because his looking at the ground. He lives in a dirty apartment with food all over the ground, he sits down on the couch until he drifts to sleep. drity and raged clothe Lazy slaps on in the morning and leafs them on at night, his torn boots squeak when ever he puts them on.

__Thursday 7 June__

__Wednesday 1 June__
 * 1) Two brothers that come back in time to change the past in order to save the future.
 * 2) Three Teenagers are trying to solve the mystery behind a large war that claimed the lives of their great relatives that no one knew existed.
 * 3) Someone trying to solve the mystery behind the death of his family, from when he was young. But someone is erasing his memory, making it hard to solve the crime.
 * 4) Police are trying to catch a mysterious serial killer that murders people who take life for granted in broad daylight infront of large crowds of people, without knowing the victims and without being seen. But the police officer on the case soon realises he is next on the killers hit list.
 * 5) People are mysteriously dissapereing for exactly 13 days. When they return they are the complete opposite of their previous self. The U.S.A military suspect the russian military are kidnapping people and making super soldiers for the ultimate assassination of the U.S.A president and military, and it is up to one team of highly trained soldiers and detectives to solve the mystery and stop the russian military.